My eyes are still red,
itchy, puffy, and tear-filled,
but I feel
better.
The initial pain is gone,
and it’s time for me
to move
to change
to decide what I need to do next.
For although crying has certain
healing qualities,
it in no way resembles
a solution.
Although the worries may
leak out with the tears,
the problem is still there.
And now I must face it.
Boy Hitler Removed From Home
15 years ago
2 comments:
Yay! I just finished my essay and now I have read your poem. Here are my thoughts: I like the idea a lot and your inspiration for it. However, it seems too analytical. I would like to see, at least initially more of the emotional response or the emotionally laden thoughts before you get too 'reason'able. I put just reason is quotes because it seems laden with reason as opposed to feeling or sentiment or something, almost to the exclusion of feeling and such. I really like this line 'Although the worries may
leak out with the tears,'. Do my comments make sense? If not, ask and I shall endeavor to clarify. Oh, I also have poetry I would like critiqued. I shall be brave and post it on inklings blog. Well, that's not so scary since no one but you and occasionally John or I really reads that blog on anything like a regular basis.
Hmm, I don't know. I sort of meant it to be rather practical. The emotional part is supposed to be over when the poem is beginning.
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